i also learn that there were 3 things that was very important as a guidance to make a better introduction and they are :
the hook : it was designed to grab the reader attention immediately and made us want to read more on the essay topic .
transition : move the reader from the hook to the driving force of the essay
thesis : makes the contract with the reader about what we will discuss in other paragraph without telling about it but just giving the clue .
here are some example on how to write the introductory paragraph :
1. Personal examples
(LESBIAN)
on saturday,december 20, 2009, we met a pair of 'pengkid' at shopping complex, kuala lumpur.
one of them wore a tight t-shirt and jeans like a man and the other one wore a blouse.
sam, 20 years old girl who came from kedah,
became a 'pengkid' because she was raped by her boyfriend who was older than her.
from that point, she did not get any attention from her family.
futhermore, she had been influenced by her friends who had been through the same experience.
she came to kuala lumpur with a male character and her dressing as well as a guy looks alike.
she wanted to be a male because
she would understand female more than a male understand them and she also
did not want all girls out there to be cheated by guys.
sam life was full of bad experiences and she seemed to have no goals in her life.
nevertheless,few reason such as that can make a woman become a 'pengkid',
that is family problem, enviroment and the past experience.
2. Quotations
(example of quotation)
'as long as society is anti-gay, then it will seem like being gay is anti-social'. this thought was written by joseph francis. people can see someone personality regarding to the individual behaviour. futhermore, it will give a bad perception to them. when the society sees the odd thing like man with a man they will say that it was annoying. people will isolate them and think the negative perception about them. but they do not care about the society opinion about them. based on the statement above,there are many negative impacts of being a gay rather than positive one.
3. Facts or statistics
(transvestites among us)
According to the book, 'Men in dresses' by Vernon Coleman,...precise figures are difficult to obtain but my research shows that in an average week 100,00 in every 1,000,000 men dress-for some of the time-in something soft, silky or frilly. Often they just wear a camisole and panties underneath their male clothes. A growing number of men have discovered that putting on stockings and the frock is the quickest way to escape from the stressful responsibilities of being man.The statistics had showed the number of men who want to become women's has increasing among us in newspaper, radio, television and internet.There are many causes why men being women such as partners , biological, and media influences.
(transvestites among us)
According to the book, 'Men in dresses' by Vernon Coleman,...precise figures are difficult to obtain but my research shows that in an average week 100,00 in every 1,000,000 men dress-for some of the time-in something soft, silky or frilly. Often they just wear a camisole and panties underneath their male clothes. A growing number of men have discovered that putting on stockings and the frock is the quickest way to escape from the stressful responsibilities of being man.The statistics had showed the number of men who want to become women's has increasing among us in newspaper, radio, television and internet.There are many causes why men being women such as partners , biological, and media influences.
4. Rhetorical questions
have you ever heard about gender conversion? have you met someone who performed the gender conversion? how they perform the gender conversion. now in time, the gender conversion is famous among men and it has become widespread. they are many Asian's men perform the gender conversion in thailand. this has lead to many negatives effects to them.bad opinion from community, bring discrediton themselves and their family, and easy infection of bacteria are mostly the major for those who performed the gender conversion.
have you ever heard about gender conversion? have you met someone who performed the gender conversion? how they perform the gender conversion. now in time, the gender conversion is famous among men and it has become widespread. they are many Asian's men perform the gender conversion in thailand. this has lead to many negatives effects to them.bad opinion from community, bring discrediton themselves and their family, and easy infection of bacteria are mostly the major for those who performed the gender conversion.
5. Current events
(gay issue)
the news about gay marriage between a malaysian, ariff alfian rosli and his lover, an irish man was reported on december 20th last year. it was a big shock to every malaysian's eyes and ears. it was embarrasing enough to know that he got married with his own sex and it was just unacceptable when he was spotted wearing malaysian tradisional apparel during the ceremony. in facts, ariff denies the accusation that claimed he had converted out of islam, he stressed that he were remain a muslim until the day he die even though he had strayed from islam by marrying his own sex.naturally all religion prevents their followers from getting involved in homosexual relationship. based on ariff's story, there are many negative impacts that gay marriage offers to the society, religion and country.
(gay issue)
the news about gay marriage between a malaysian, ariff alfian rosli and his lover, an irish man was reported on december 20th last year. it was a big shock to every malaysian's eyes and ears. it was embarrasing enough to know that he got married with his own sex and it was just unacceptable when he was spotted wearing malaysian tradisional apparel during the ceremony. in facts, ariff denies the accusation that claimed he had converted out of islam, he stressed that he were remain a muslim until the day he die even though he had strayed from islam by marrying his own sex.naturally all religion prevents their followers from getting involved in homosexual relationship. based on ariff's story, there are many negative impacts that gay marriage offers to the society, religion and country.
6. Contrast to the thesis statement
previously, gay marriage was not allowed in New York. It got a lot of resistance from every side. It consisted of few factors such as gay marriage will change the foundation of society as well as encouraged more guy couple to get marriage, In addition, it also against teh religion and no religion in this world allowed homosexuality.Gay marriage occurs when people get relationship problem and starts to hate different gender, They feel that the same gender is more in their shoes.There are many negative impacts why gay marriage is allowed now in New York as gay's advocate get the highest vote from the citizen, majority of them are homosexual and less legal relationship, as well as the government get strong protest from gay's communities.
7. Definition
previously, gay marriage was not allowed in New York. It got a lot of resistance from every side. It consisted of few factors such as gay marriage will change the foundation of society as well as encouraged more guy couple to get marriage, In addition, it also against teh religion and no religion in this world allowed homosexuality.Gay marriage occurs when people get relationship problem and starts to hate different gender, They feel that the same gender is more in their shoes.There are many negative impacts why gay marriage is allowed now in New York as gay's advocate get the highest vote from the citizen, majority of them are homosexual and less legal relationship, as well as the government get strong protest from gay's communities.
7. Definition
(SHEMALE)
Shemale can be defined as men who have the same characteristic like a woman. These type of men love about fashion, cosmetic, hairstyle and many more. Moreover, they also get a good achievement in any field rather than women. They are very talented and creative to create a new things in the world of lifestyle. In addiction, some of them will try to be like a woman using surgery and medicine which is expensive. As a result this community give a bad reputation to our enviroment. Thus,some impacts have been recognized based on this situation such as disease problem, legal aspects and social problems.
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